21Mar. Kindle.
More tedium. I was informed that this one was much better than Hays' first effort, The Cadence.
Well, I suppose I could bring myself to go better, it could hardly have been worse. But I don't think I
could go much better. My friend told me that at least it was shorter. OK, that was an improvement.
Can I whine now? For crying out loud, the woman used to be an English teacher - doesn't she know how to
run a spell-checker? I don't claim to be without error in that department, but I do run spellcheck and if a
word looks funny to me - I google it. Bad grammar and usage is simply inexcuseable (lay and lie, for crying
out loud). And then there are the multiple instances of wrong-worditis - one that comes to mind was the use
of the word "rain" in place of "reign." And not all of them were homophones - there was at least one
sentence fairly early on that I simply never did figure out, I have no idea what she was trying to say. There
were probably more, but fairly early on I started reading very, very fast. I was personally irritated from page
one by her use of "hogan" to describe the huts they lived in. For one thing, the structures she described were
not hogans, and it showed a remarkable ignorance of and insensitivity to the culture in which the people do
live in hogans.
Then we have the matter of the zodiac. Great chunks of the terminology of the book, including the title of
the series, are based on the fact that our sixteen-year-old heroine was born in the eleventh month therefore
under the sign of Sagittarius, the Archer. Can happen - but most of November (the eleventh month, at last
count) falls under Scorpio. And that would have been such an easy fix!
The plot was thin and fraught with logical inconsistencies. If she wanted to show a female dominated
society, she should have read some of the good stuff - Tepper's The Gate to Women's Country comes
to mind. Maybe Atwood's The Handmaid's Tale for an opposite view. And there was one - I can't
remember either the title or the author at the moment - maybe Silverberg - in which women dominate and
men are pampered boy-toys - much more practical than locking them in foul stinking holes and expecting
girls to go copulate with them there. If she was after the post-apocalyptic thing, there is a world of reading
that she should have done first, including a couple of short stories which she almost certainly taught as a
high school English teacher but apparently did not read. YA does not mean that the audience is stupid.
This was also billed to be as a venture into Christian YA fiction. Really? Nothing even remotely Christian
showed up. Mind you, I don't consider that a flaw - self-consciously so-called Christian so-called literature I
generally find fairly offensive. I think she threw in the "Christian" tag as a retrofit to try to tap into a genre
audience (and publisher?). The scripture verses at the head of each chapter were seldom even remotely
related to anything in the following text. I had this vision of the writer sitting with her finished manuscript
and a concordance searching for verses which contained key words from the following material, to hell with
relevance.
I am really sorry that I wasted as much of my spring break reading this and the Atlantis mess as I did.
Although I purchased it, I doubt if I will ever actually read the second book in this trilogy, in which I
understand we have teenage mutant ninja boys. Enjoy your royalties, Ms. Hays - I don't think you will get
anymore from me.